Final Project rough draft- Kristin

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The link above takes you to my rough draft of my pages with my partner’s stories and my own stories that I tried to create using a parallel structure to his.

3 Responses to "Final Project rough draft- Kristin"

Theresa Dolson says:

November 24, 2016 at 12:02 am

How are you feeling about the project?
1. Kristin Joostema says:
  
  November 24, 2016 at 12:19 pm
  
  Now that I have a solid idea of what I want to do for my portion of it I am feeling a lot better. I actually really like my draft, but I definitely want to get some feedback from other people, because I think a fresh set of eyes will make it even better. I also want to see how it fits in with other people’s ideas and pages. I think the more physical stuff that is done, the better I will feel.
Maria Acosta says:

November 26, 2016 at 10:22 am

Hey Kristin!
Wow I absolutely love this!! I really like the direct parallelism based of your partner’s writings. I did catch one small typo; in the paragraphs about both of your pasts, you wrote “it showered me” instead of “it showed me”. Now this is so super minor but otherwise I think it’s great. You figured out a way to bring the two contrasts of you and your partner’s lives/ goals in a way that is not condescending towards him. Great job!!

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